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    Post I write songs

    Soooo, a week ago my first true love ( i know soo cute im 16 blah blah blah) dropped me and told me "I never was truthfull about my feelings to you" so i got the idea she never really cared, and being a moody 16 yearold and a Junior in Highschool who just lost his prom date. I went into a hole and basically crawled out with my heart on paper sooo heres the song i wrote, hope you like it =)


    Still dont have a name for it, Suggestions are welcome though.









    By: Cure Wilson


    ‎(piece 1)
    Its just a game to you
    After all we went through
    And you drop me like a toy
    Now....
    Its the end of us
    Im to write it off
    And if I try to think
    Of you...I

    (piece 2)
    No matter what you do
    I'll have you know we're through
    No more pain just from you
    From you.
    Now I've given up
    On this hopeless love
    And in the darkness cast by you...
    I....

    (Part 3)
    AND WHEN YOU SCREAM FOR HELP
    YOU CAN GO TO HELL
    YOU PRETTY LITTLE BITCH
    YOU FUCKING
    LIAR!!
    DEAL WITH IT
    FACE YOUR DEMONS!!

    (chorus)(after 3 guitar goes acoustic for 4lines)
    Cry,
    To the healing of the light
    Try,
    To see every little lie
    That you told me
    Oh you told me
    Lies.....
    Cut open my heart I
    Want to see whats inside
    And I'll try
    To find the reasons why
    I cant see past your lies....

    (end)
    See past you lies
    Your lies-----
    your lies....

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    Lupin
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    Hmm i dont understand that much of music but i can say its good i didnt like Part 3 tho

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Gift received at 08-14-2012, 10:22 AM from KremeChoco
    Sounds like heavy metal/rock-ish or emo.

    I gotta say, the fact that I can read it to a tune in my head while listening to random other music is pretty good.

    I don't often say this, but you have potential, don't waste it. Then again, it most likely is wasted in my opinion because I love sounds, not really words.

    I also have to say that while the song is good, I don't really like the lyrics. (What, but WolfRaven you only read the lyrics.)
    All I can say is that if you channeled this into a different emotion, I would enjoy the song more.

    Remember, when you break up with someone, you just experienced something amazing; treasure the memory's you had together, not the final words.
    His tongue was growing hair and his throat was raw, but his cock was as hard as an iron bar.
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